Thought you might be interested in how I revise my drafts. I have a few writer friends whose opinion I value. I ask them to read the draft and then post their comments (on another forum). I consider their comments, plus my own inclinations and incorporate them all into that chapter. We will go through this chapter by chapter. At the end of the book, I will humbly request their opinion of the book setup, plot lines, characterization and dialogue overall.
I won’t show you all the revisions separately and bore you to tears, but I thought you might enjoy seeing the first one. From now on, to save your sanity, I will just post the revision in The Rocky Road… section. If you are so inclined, you can scan it before you read the next chapter. Go here to see it.